Feedback from Will
Does it make narrative sense?
It makes sense however some dialogue is sound is missing. Easy to follow and makes sense.
Do the special effects fit well with the sequence? How could they be improved?
Works well and looks good. Could use different smoke effects. A black box around the fireball. Could add some sort of glow.
Is the dialogue engaging?
The dialogue tells the story and doesn't feel like its there to full time. Some clips need the sound editing (you can hear others talking)
What do the sound FX, ambient sounds and music add?
The punch sound effect sounds really good and is in time. Not much sound FX in the clip yet.
Is it entertaining?
The story is clear and entertaining. This bits where dialogue stop slightly confuses it.
What would you do to improve the sequence?
More detail to the special effects such as adding a glow to the fireball hand and removing the black box. Add new sounds in where you can "go" signal.
Feedback from Dana
Does it make narrative sense?
Yes, the talking goes with whats happening.
Do the special effects fit well with the sequence? How could they be improved?
The disappearing effect flows very well but with the fireball you can see a square around it.
Is the dialogue engaging?
Yes, it is very clear and the dialogue used in the bully scene draws you in.
What do the sound FX, ambient sounds and music add?
The noises used in the bathroom scene work really well. It creates the environment of the place they are in.
Is it entertaining?
Yes, I thought it was really good. The bully scene was quite realistic and tense.
What would you do to improve the sequence?
Try not to have the dolly stand and cut out the directors voice.
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